GMAT Analytical Writing Assessment: Argument

10. The following appeared in the editorial section of a local newspaper.
“This past winter, 200 students from Waymarsh State College traveled to the state capitol building to protest against proposed cuts in funding for various state college programs. The other 12,000 Waymarsh students evidently weren’t so concerned about their education: they either stayed on campus or left for winter break. Since the group who did not protest is far more numerous, it is more representative of the state’s college students than are the protesters. Therefore the state legislature need not heed the appeals of the protesting students.”

Discuss how well reasoned you find this argument. In your discussion be sure to analyze the line of reasoning and the use of evidence in the argument. For example, you may need to consider what questionable assumptions underlie the thinking and what alternative explanations or counterexamples might weaken the conclusion. You can also discuss what sort of evidence would strengthen or refute the argument, what changes in the argument would make it more logically sound, and what, if anything, would help you better evaluate its conclusion.
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My writing in 30 minutes:

The argument above asserts at least the following three unreasonable points: 1) 200 protesters were not representative enough for Waymarsh state college, 2) 12,000 studetns weren't so concerned about their education just because they did not show up at the demostration, and 3)because they are not representative, the state legislature need not heed their appeals.

First of all, a question raised from this editorial is that what percentage of protesters is representative enough ? In my opinions, if most of the Waymarch college students agree or sign up to support the protestors, even one is quite enough. We also need to consider the composition of those protestors. Maybe they are either the leaders of certain student association, or the class leaders delegated by the students. In such a circumstance, 200 are definitely representative enough.

Secondly, we have to consider the other students' states of minds. Staying on campus or leaving for winter break doesn't neccessarily mean that they do not care. They might care about this issue more than anyone else does and hope that the government will heed their appeals. Besides, it is also possible that the capitol building is too small to have all students gather at the same time. Those absent students are then rational to choose not to go to the demostration. Such an absence doesn't mean they were not concerned.

Finally, even if the 200 students are only minority for this appeal, the legisture should not thus ignore it. Instead, they should try to understand their thought and find a way to solve the problems. Even minority is part of the society and deserves the attention from related units.

In conclusion, it is too arbitrary to assert that those protestors are not representative enough for the students. Besides, it is simply wrong for the legislature not to pay attention to the public. Before the legislature decide not the heed their appeals, they better think twice !
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Sample Essay:

The conclusion in this argument is that the state legislature need not consider the views of protesting students. To support this conclusion, the author points out that only 200 of the 12,000 students traveled to the state capitol to voice their concerns about proposed cuts in college programs. Since the remaining students did not take part in this protest, the author concludes they are not interested in this issue. The reasoning in this argument is flawed for two reasons.

First, the author assumes that because only one-hundredth of the students took part in the protest, these students’ views are unrepresentative of the entire student body. This assumption is unwarranted. If it turns out, for example, that the protesting students were randomly selected from the entire student body, their views would reflect the views of the entire college. Without information regarding the way in which the protesting students were selected, it is presumptuous to conclude that their opinions fail to reflect the opinions of their colleagues.

Second, the author cites the fact that the remaining 12,000 students stayed on campus or left for winter break as evidence that they are not concerned about their education. One obvious rejoinder to this line of reasoning is that the students who did not participate did so with the knowledge that their concerns would be expressed by the protesting students. In any case, the author has failed to demonstrate a logical connection between the students’ alleged lack of concern and the fact that they either stayed on campus or left for winter break. Without this connection, the conclusion reached by the author that the remaining 12,000 students are not concerned about their education is unacceptable.

As it stands, the argument is not well reasoned. To make it logically acceptable, the author would have to demonstrate that the protesting students had some characteristic in common that biases their views, thereby nullifying their protest as representative of the entire college.